Our studio
Reflection to Stalking by Jingpu Liu
Your script is well-conceived, focusing mainly on the safety of women living alone, which really deserves the attention of society. But I think your plot is still lacking. The plot can manifest in several ways, for example: before and after the character changes and contrasts, what changed her? How things got tricky – intrigues viewers to keep watching the film. Add a few more call backs in the plot, for example: the snacks/drinks/bread bought in the convenience store can appear again at the back of the film, and the cappuccino bought in the coffee shop can also have a symbolic meaning. The number and purpose of the scenes are more explicit.
The plot in the second half of the script is still relatively compact, and the direction of the plot has changed since the call to the police, making the audience very nervous and curious about whether this “voyeur” will be caught.
I especially liked that the early shots were recorded with a “voyeur” subjective shot that shifted to third person after Avy found out he was being followed.
I think the script could be a micro-budget movie, as you mentioned taking advantage of free public spaces or borrowing from family would be a good option.
Reflection to Who kill me by Fangmin Lan
I especially like your suspense story line. I am particularly clear about the content of the lens content. I can even imagine the picture of the movie.
I think the scene of Lily’s fall into the water to be the first scene is very wise, which arouses the curiosity of the audience. The latter scenes were used to explain why Lily would fall into the water, whether it was pushed down or accidentally stepped in. When Lily fell into the water, why was the parents not at home, was it intentionally called away or for something else? All these questions got the answer to a certain extent when they saw the third page. But is this brother’s dual personality still changed because of pushing his sister’s water? Is it because mum and dad were not paying attention to the kids as a result of the things that happened?
The final open ending allows the audience to discuss. When we face a fifteen -year -old boy, we should look at him from what attitude and perspective should we look at him. Will his suicide be successful?
I think this is a successful micro -budget movie script, and the main scene is in a home with a swimming pool. As you mentioned, borrowing venues from friends is a good idea. However, it should be noted that the emotion of acting as the actor Tony is very necessary after the shooting, and it is necessary to conduct psychological counseling in time.
Other studio – The Scene in Cinema
Reflection to Lost by Xi(Anna) Wang
https://www.mediafactory.org.au/2022-the-scene-in-cinema/2022/05/31/lost-xianna-wang/
I especially love the contrast between the first half and the second half that you created in the film. Most of the shots in the first half are long shots, and the audience can easily be brought into the mood following the rhythm of the background music. The 40-second film features a girl as the main body and subtitles to help the audience understand the word “Lost”.
I’m especially glad that you added thought to the editing process, and at the end of the loudest drumbeat, the girl in the film starts to move forward. Although she is in deep confusion, but she still moves/walks forward on the road. In the last scene of the film, the girl smiled at the camera. Although it was a shy smile, it was the opposite of the emotion at the beginning of the film, such as “Although I am very confused about life, I still smile to face all the unknowns.”
But I think the film could do more with the plot and content, creating a little plot to make the transition, to make the contrast richer.
Reflection to The Pen by Ella Watt
https://www.mediafactory.org.au/2022-the-scene-in-cinema/2022/05/31/the-pen-ella-watt/
I’m so glad you made this bold attempt. We usually think that if the dialogue appears in the movie, the director will choose to use the front and back shots to complete, two characters are face to face, three camera positions, the camera shot over the shoulder of the person who is facing away from the camera, after editing the camera will show the relationship between the characters and the characters. switch between each other. In this film, the tension of the film is built up through the movement and manipulation of the camera, allowing the audience to hold their breath to see what happens afterward.
I think the camera movement is a little rushed in the second half of the film. Reversing the shot and shortening the shot time can also accomplish the meaning of the film in the script. However, as a lens language to assist in completing the content of the script, you can consider the combination of moving the lens and the front and back shots to complete it. Or consider reducing camera movement and the lines spoken by the standing girl can be presented as a voiceover instead of relying on camera movement. Looking forward to your following production.