week 8 feedback

• Is it necessary to have the title appearing both at the beginning and the end?
• The light leaks look a little like lens flares that don’t make sense in the context of the shot
• The blacks in some shots look a little crunched – recommend bringing up the shadows
• The rhythm sometimes feels too rushed; want to see more of her talking before we see the cutaways
• The text and titles look a little to harsh; suggested slight gaussian blur

I was most grateful for this week’s feedback, as the people I showed on my table were the first (other than my family) to see my fine cut from start to finish. It’s always such a benefit to get other people’s perspective and I have learned to even treasure the feedback I disagree with. The aspects of my film that I did adapt according to my feedback were the light leaks, the shadows and highlights, timing of the cutaways and slight blur on the texts. With the light leaks, I definitely wanted them included over the footage of May and Paul in the gardens as I wanted to create a more warm, romantic atmosphere, but I was glad my classmates pointed out that it didn’t make much sense as lens flare-lookalikes on a cool-looking shot. Some of them did suggest getting rid of it altogether, but I definitely wanted to keep the warm colour leaks to emphasise the certain mood of the scene. Thus, to adjust it, I zoomed in on the light leak to get rid of the more harsh colours and had a more lighter opacity light leak that did a more ‘tint’ effect to the footage. In discussion about my placement of opening and closing titles, two of my classmates thought that as a 3 minute film, the title didn’t need to be repeated twice and was more appropriate to appear once at the end. I understood their point of view, but I was already quite happy with the rhythm of the opening titles with the music and my subject’s voiceover. In the end, I decided to keep the title appearing both in the opening and closing, but this is definitely something I will keep in mind for next time I create another short film.