Study Buddy Script

Project Brief 2 Question 2

LINK TO STUDY BUDDY SCRIPT

 

a) What you think works with the piece

The nine frames from Study Buddy were simple to follow and we could easily imagine what could have happened between the two characters. The pace and the locations really work well in creating the script. Firstly, the pacing of the story was just right when you looked at how the story forms from the beginning to the end. The audience were able to know more about each of the character through two to three individual frames showing how lonely they were at the beginning. The story slowly builds up to them meeting at the waiting room. After that, the rest of the frames consist of them interacting. The degree of them interacting becomes even closer at the end. The pacing was nice and slow for the audience to interpret what it is about.

Secondly, the locations reflected the mood of the characters really well. In the script, I was able to describe the location to set the mood of the story. For example, in the second picture where Justin sits in the middle of the dark hall, it reflects how empty and lonely he is. While the sun on the other side shines through the coloured stained glass reflecting that warmness is reaching out to him. It could also foreshadow the upcoming scenes where he forms a new friendship. The contrast in that location allows the character mood to be reflected upon. The location works really well in blending a story together with the characters.

Lastly, the way I tried to describe the sound of the environment they are in reflects the world they live in. For example, in the third picture, I described the sound in this manner where the “busy city noise slowly fades out as she reaches the last step”. I feel that it helps to imagine how the place might sound like especially when the characters are always alone. The sound around them amplifies and that it is easy for them to shut themselves away from the world.  Describing the sound sets the mood and explores the sound in their location.

Thus, pacing, locations and describing sounds really help in reflecting the mood of the story. The story is able to flow with these few pointers.

b) How you think the piece could be improved

The script can be improved firstly, with more descriptive words. I feel there is a lot more room to improve in terms of describing the location and characters to make it more impactful. I am not good at describing things in “fluffy” language so certain parts of my script sound flat like there is no emotion. There are certain scenes that I am not too sure how to describe the framing in screenwriting language. The framing will help the audience to imagine better. I feel that it will make the story more intimate in knowing the characters and the relationship that they form later in the story. Lastly, the character development through the dialogues between the two characters is fairly simple and light which does not really reflect their characters which were portrayed beforehand. I feel that there isn’t a hint to show the different emotion when the characters were alone or with somebody. I should have included a description of how the characters feel in a change in environment. There should be an inner dialogue or hints of them actually feeling uncomfortable being in a new environment.

This script can be further improved with deeper details reflecting the emotion of the characters together with more action. I am not good with my words and hopefully, through other exercises, it will help me improve my screenwriting.

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